Got a few comments from the Writers' Groups on Facebook about the first 500+ words of the Prologue and made several amendments to the first page of the Prologue. There have been several inputs on change in points-of-view, repetitive adjectives and descriptions, and names of characters. I suppose when the genesis of the novel stemmed from the fact that it was written as a screenplay originally, where the scriptwriter has to 'describe' what is happening from a visual point-of-view, it is hard to move away from a visual style of writing. Not only that, you need to also get into the details a little bit more (defining character features, flaws, tics) and smells (we always lose that in a screenplay, but not in a novel).
In adapting the script into a book, there has to be additional measures made such as:
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Terry Astrial is an alias I'm using for this website & our social media channels (yep, it's not my real name). I'm born & raised in Asia.